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You're about as convincing as the safety
on a loaded gun.
And about as thrilling as
Russian Roulette.
You're begging for a trigger
to escape your troubled head.

Its like watching a car crash
From a window that I cant break.
You're falling down again
Tripping over tangled thoughts inside your head
That you cant pray away.
Well if you agree to be the patient,
I'll be the best damn doctor you've ever had.
I prescribe the perfect antidote..

Love.

Dont scream too hard lovely.
You're going to lose your voice.
For your throats sake,
Use a whisper and save
Some of your precious breath for words that
Deserve to be said.

You're a terrible liar,
With a knack for telling me you're fine.
I can see deeper than that.
I dont understand how someone can have so much to say
and just not speak a word.
Much less a sentence.
We're all listening now..
Deep down I know thats what you wanted.
©2005-2009 *whorer-movie
:iconwhorer-movie:

Author's Comments

About the love of my life and the problems hes been having.

Since my camera is broken, I thought Id submit something that I wrote lastnight.
As usual, I couldnt sleep. Thats how I always get my poems..sleepless nights and junk.

Try and enjoy, its sketchy.

:heart:

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:icondeviantdragonstills:
Very....very cool...

I hope he gets the message....

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:iconevenbecause:
UGH how badly I know this. Kinda crazy how word for word I relate...

ONE suggestion...someone suggested this to me before...that every beginning line doesn't have to begin with a capitol. Like, if the line doesn't end with a period, don't begin the next with a capitol.

Doesn't really matter, I still LOVE the poem. Someone told me it's, distracting or something.

Yah, ignore me :)

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"They call me a poet,
I wonder what they would say if
they saw me
from the inside?" -Saul Williams


~Jenn
:iconsuicidal-kisses:
I love this, I can totally relate to it, both personally and with the one I love. great work! =D

:heart:

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:iconwolviesgirl:
i love it, great story... i like how it doesnt all ryme. you made it work. good job
:iconxoxlovelymistake:
this is really, really well done. it felt off in the begginning as i read it, but then it turned into a lovely story. i thinka lot of people say that they're fine, and i think it takes a true friend to be able to look into their eyes and tell them that they're not. and that thats okay.:heart:fave:)
:iconrikusgirl:
Very well written :heart:. THis peice has excellent wording as well as emotion emanating from it, wonderful job :) :heart: :hug:
:iconpaperhatman:
Wow. I usually don't like poetry, but that was amazing. I love it! :)

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:iconappletreesrtall:
I really like this, good job
:iconlicejammin:
I fell in love with the first line.

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:iconscreamingscars:
amazing!!!

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