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I have set those free, who I do not need,

In order to get a tighter grasp on those I do.

I have gone down roads without destinations,

To accidentally stumble upon heaven, and bits of hell.

Miles of concrete gobbled up by underbellies of cold machines,

And at my lowest points, I have counted my blessings.



I am okay with loss now.

I am okay with picking up the pieces.

And I am definitely okay with trying.



Minutes and hours have passed where I have felt nothing but content inside this heart,

And in that,

I am okay with crossing out calendar days, which held moments of despair.

Because I have realized:

After the storms have passed, and the earth is busy dissolving the aftermath,

Darkness falls, and in the mean-time,

The sun will always peak over the horizon.


I will have a child’s eyes, seeing everything for the first time,

And everything will be beautiful again.
Something I wrote for my Creative Writing 2 class awhile ago. This was my favorite poem that I wrote in that class.

I just realized all the poetry I have on here is omega old, and super shitty. I think my poetry has improved since I was 15 :P



anyway, I enjoy a change.
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:icon5skin:
5skin Featured By Owner May 7, 2010
Deep - Very nice.
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sooky-baby Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2009
What does "Carpe Diem" mean? WOW this is not shit seriously this is excellent work that reflects people coping with lost. Love it
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marikaejibia Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2009
nice!!!

ps CARPE DIEM is my university's slogan
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MissMellonCollie Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2008  Student General Artist
i must disagree.
i believe it was u who wrote one of the most amazing poems i have yet to read here on dA,
Imight have faved it from my other account. but some of lifes best poetry is written in days of angst.
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tildesk Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
very well written. Thoughtful and brilliant.
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Hollowsins Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2008
It's nice to see more poetry from you, your poetry was why i watched you to begin with, not that the images aren't good or anything. I just hope to see more of this.
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madalisoahc Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2008
If indeed this is one of your lesser works, then if you where to use all you have, you could paint a day with a single sentence, and a lifetime with a poem.
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AlienLazer Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2008
Wonderful in its dept.
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tragicbutterfly5 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2008
This is beautiful. :)
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ErilisVampyre Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2008
Wods and hopes more presious and important then gold...and all this is in your possession. Charish it highly among all else.
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thedarkphotographer Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2008   Photographer
purely...beautiful...
you put my poetry to shame.
i also have improved. i was really into poetry in 8th grade, now 4 years later i read it and its total shit. the stuff i write now is better, but its still not that great.
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SRP1998 Featured By Owner May 31, 2008
...Beautifully written. Love it.
If this is one of the shitty ones, I'm sure I'd be absolutely enthralled by a good one....
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revolutionarykind Featured By Owner May 30, 2008
You need to stop being so self-deprecating. Take pride that you have not only a creative eye for beauty but apparently a grasp of language that can evoke the image in words.

This is well done especially for work as a youth. The burden of so much life experience at so young an age at least has given you the inspiration and depth to produce inventive art (now in two mediums).
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whorer-movie Featured By Owner May 31, 2008
Thank you very much. I appreciate your comment :heart:
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amfjklblah Featured By Owner May 29, 2008
This is one of the hottest things ever.:heart:
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avalanchepark Featured By Owner May 29, 2008
really interesting piece

"I have set those free, who I do not need,
In order to get a tighter grasp on those I do."

great opener , great expression

"Minutes and hours have passed where I have felt nothing but content inside this heart,

And in that,

I am okay with crossing out calendar days, which held moments of despair."

just a wonderful expression of the ideas and feelings .

I thought all the writing was good but these bits really seemed worth mentioning
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mmusA Featured By Owner May 29, 2008
Wonderfully written. I relate to this quite a lot, especially right now in my life. I am glad I clicked on this. Keep up the creative work!
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cathuggaa Featured By Owner May 29, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thats Beautiful. Your A Wise Girl.
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brokenwings02 Featured By Owner May 29, 2008
i think this poem is really well written.
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nhim666 Featured By Owner May 29, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
...:speechless:... i can relate to what you've wrote and personally i don't think it is worthless. if you read all the comment people have left, you can see that you have create something beautiful. you have succeed to touch us, your watcher, deeply :D

p.s. sorry, english isn't my main language ^^;
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marti-tong Featured By Owner May 29, 2008
you just dont know how much i am moved with this. Perfect epitome! thank you..
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brokensymphony Featured By Owner May 28, 2008  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This really speaks to me right now. Very beautifully done.

Question though, I hope you don't mind - do you mean "peak" (as in "to reach highest point") or "peek" (as in "to peer over") in the next to last line? I wasn't sure if it was a typo, or intentional, and I was curious. At first I thought it was a typo but I could see it as a possible artistic choice (maybe we can always see the highest point waiting on the horizon?).
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imadorkwad Featured By Owner May 28, 2008   Interface Designer
my favourite part:

"I have gone down roads without destinations, To accidentally stumble upon heaven, and bits of hell."

i can definitely relate.
beautiful poem. ^.^
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amalei Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
nice..can relate!!
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IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner May 28, 2008  Student Writer
This is really great. And a perfect title ^_^ Seize the day!
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kitalovessm Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
I can relate to this piece on so many levels - it's like the written form of what I've personally had to deal with in the past few years. Far more eloquently put than I ever could. Great job :D
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Corvidae65 Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
This is excellent! :clap: It speaks directly to my soul. Thank you :+fav:
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OhFoxyLady Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
beautiful
I like the ending.
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Blumcsi Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
I don't think it's shitty
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peacemakerross Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
really good, not just an " i hate life" or "my life is perfect" poem, really well written, and i loved this line

"And at my lowest points, I have counted my blessings."
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thredd Featured By Owner May 28, 2008  Student General Artist
this is amazingly helpful,actually.
i would like to have this outlook.
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cheers and xo.eternal
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Gauffin Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
sometimes you just take pokemon too seriously
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American-poet Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
"Listen, you hear it? - - Carpe - - hear it? - - Carpe, carpe diem, seize the day boys, make your lives extraordinary."

Beautifully worded, simple yet conveys the message and thoughts without question. <3 Keeping innocence alive even after having been through hard things is tough, but. Yea.

I love this. <3
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Dya-mond-ay Featured By Owner May 28, 2008  Student General Artist
i like it =]
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AprilViolets Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
I really needed this. Thank you for sharing it!
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Unaccompanied-me Featured By Owner May 28, 2008   Writer
Very simple ideas, and simply phrased. This poem is best that way. Definitely.
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Kayami92 Featured By Owner May 28, 2008  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
this is beautiful
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shaikhrahib Featured By Owner May 28, 2008  Student Writer
brilliant !

i love this part:

'After the storms have passed, and the earth is busy dissolving the aftermath,
Darkness falls, and in the mean-time,
The sun will always peak over the horizon.'
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snseol Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
Very unique and kind of feel the same with this.
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artistic-writer Featured By Owner May 28, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Very Beautiful! Spoken in the words of a true poet. The ending left off on very hopeful note, and gave me a sense of innocence. Love it!
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Perrcy Featured By Owner May 28, 2008  Student General Artist
brilliantly done
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xglassgalaxyx Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
glorious.
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RenderedHelpless Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
< words 3
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gekitsu Featured By Owner May 28, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i L.O.V.E. the part about having childs eyes, thus keeping beauty from being tainted and even eradicated from everything.

very wise words you speak there.
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Athysette Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
Very well done. I love it. :+fav::
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GUllWings134 Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
omg thats beautiful, i wish i could record my feelings in words like that, but untill i do i'll stick with unfinished pictures XDD [[and believe me, i have millions]]
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slickrick17 Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
extremely well written.

and.. there's not much
more i can say.

it's great. :]
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Wonderful-Color Featured By Owner May 28, 2008   Photographer
this is really beautiful.
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amelia-azazello Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
(...) I will have a child’s eyes, seeing everything for the first time,


i love that desire of life :)
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KatMPhotography Featured By Owner May 28, 2008  Professional Photographer
I especially :heart: this line:

I am okay with crossing out calendar days, which held moments of despair.




Brilliant. x
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